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Analysis
The sitting area in the back of Patterson Office Tower is a small space which falls in-between the classrooms in which meet the English as a Second Language classes, as well as other language classes, such as Japanese. Since foreign language classes tend to encourage conversation not only in the language being learned but in the speakers’ native tongue, I wondered if the space outside the classrooms was a cosmopolitan canopy or just an extension of the relationships formed in the classrooms. Elijah Anderson, author of “The Cosmopolitan Canopy,” informs us that a canopy is a place where “folk ethnography” takes place. Folk Ethnography is when people learn about the values and beliefs of others and use what they’ve learned to shape their own.
I feel that my hypothesis was disproved, and that my site was actually what Elijah Anderson, writer of “The Cosmopolitan Canopy,’ would describe as a ‘neutral’ place. In this type of place, people acknowledge each other civilly, but don’t make an attempt to truly understand others’ viewpoints. Though many of my informants believed in the possibility of communication with members of what the Japanese would call the “Out-group,” or members not within their circle (The circle being, in this case, a certain section of a Japanese class) or, as Kwame Appiah, the writer of Cosmopolitan would put it, the “imaginary stranger”(people we have an idea about but don’t really know), many of them admitted to staying within their own social circles formed in class and to not starting conversations with people they didn’t know from class. For example, in interview 6, my informant claims “No, it’s mostly people we already know.” None of the other informants claimed to take advantage of the rich variety of different viewpoints from people of different ethnicities by practicing the language they were learning or by simply starting a conversation with someone of a different race. Informant 6 also insists that “They’ve got to be the starter” and informant 4 mentions, “So I sit here and listen to people talk and then maybe someone will talk to me.” The fact that few people take advantage of the variety of different viewpoints in the sitting area in the back of Patterson can also be seen by how people position themselves within the space, which is separated into two halves because of a large open hallway opposite the exit doors. People from different sections of the same class tend to sit on different halves of the room, and they don’t typically sit with people they don’t know unless the benches are full. In some cases, they stand with their classmates and don’t sit down at all. A Cosmopolitan Canopy is a place of action and reaction, where people enlighten each other and discuss values, beliefs and other ways of life face-to-face as well as through listening and observing. How could the back of Patterson Office Tower be a canopy if everyone is waiting unproductively for an exchange of words that more than likely isn’t going to occur because everyone else is waiting, too? By embracing their fears of “looking the fool,” (Interview 6) the visitors to Patterson could become so much more knowledgeable. More than likely, if they tried speaking more to the international students, they would be treated with understanding and civility as well.
Interview 6
1) Do you come early or late to class? (You can say neither.)
Early-to interact
2) You’re a freshman, right?
Yes.
3) How would you describe the people that meet in this area?
Outgoing; social
4) Do people introduce themselves?
No, its mostly people we already know.
5) Why not? Is it because of the atmosphere or the people?
Probably the people; It’s not a fun place to be and it’s not comfortable because the doors open and they don’t close and it’s cold.
6) Would you introduce yourself to someone from a different class?
No, probably not.
7) Why?
I’m scared…
8) How full would you let a bench get before you wouldn’t sit there?
3 people is full…
9) Would you sit by someone from another class?
If there were no seats left.
10) Would you talk to them?
No.
11) What if they started talking to you?
I would talk. They’ve got to be the starter.
12) Have you noticed people standing when the benches are full?
Yes.
13) How do people on the other side respond to people on this side?
They react to our conversations.
14) And yet nobody talks to them…why?
Maybe other people don’t care what they think.

Despite this distancing, both groups are actually quite wary of each other. In interview six, my informant mentioned that the other class tends to “react to our conversations.” It’s just as Anderson mentions in his paper about the Reading Terminal Market, which he supports as a cosmopolitan canopy: “Simply put, cosmopolitan canopies are interesting places to engage in the fine art of “people watching,” for “all kinds” of folk are represented(Anderson 21). Mostly people react to others in a civil and benign way:
Interview 002
I was sitting in the back of Patterson with one other girl and we were both on our computers, when this guy comes in yelling on his cell phone. He lingers a minute at the door, then goes outside to find someone, continues to yell outside, fails to find the person he is looking for, comes back in, and sits down on the bench huffing and puffing. He then leaves and walks through again later. Another guy sings extremely loud while on his way to get on an elevator. She turns her head to look at him, but the elevator door closes, and we exchange looks of curiosity. Then I asked her a few questions.
Did he have earphones in?
I don’t know, I couldn’t see…
I couldn’t either…
Here my interview was rather choppy, because then I mentioned the yelling guy…
If someone called you in here and there were a bunch of people, would you answer your phone and talk in here, or would you leave?
Is it quiet or loud?
Good question…
I don’t answer my phone in quiet places. I might answer it in here if there were a few people, but not if there were a lot.
What if that yelling guy had talked in here?
I would have listened to his conversation…
Were you going to tell him to be quiet (Elevator guy)?
No, I think it’s entertaining…
At this point, I began to wonder if the type of conversation had anything to do with whether or not the area was suitable to carry it out…
What if you were having a conversation like that yelling guy, where you were having a confrontation on the phone?
I would definitely go outside because I know that if I’m listening to other people’s conversations, other people are too. I don’t want to make a fool of myself.

As seen by interview 002, people notice each other and react with curiosity, but they do not usually tend to reprimand each other. Instead, they practice tolerance. It would seem that most visitors to the waiting area expect some noise even if they don’t come to interact. Some do come for the interaction (See interview 4), however, many wouldn’t come if they didn’t have a class, or were waiting for a class and had something else to do. Over and over again in my interviews I heard the answer “I have nothing better to do,” when I asked the question “Why do you come here so early?” or made a remark about how early to class my informants were (See interviews 1 and 3). A few people study when they come, but people usually don’t come just to do so. As seen by the frequency they occur in my interviews, study groups are actually quite rare.